ext_112881 ([identity profile] clockwork-jo.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] cruiscin_lan 2009-12-02 03:37 pm (UTC)

Yes, I was compelled. I got into the rhythm of the clickage, haha.

OMGOSH. So cute. I love the idea that these two come up with a semblance of a family out of their tragedies.
Second person is perfect for Quinn. I feels a little too 'dear diary', and 'you' makes me think she's spent a lifetime telling herself how to feel "You feel this/ You should feel that." I don't know why I felt like a grammar ramble was appropriate, but apparently I did and here we are. WOW. She was so vulnerable in this, but not pathetic, and that's such an interesting tone to balance on.
YAY. Loved it? XD

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