okay, i waah'ed just a bit. and it takes a lot to make me waah. here is what did me in:
The girl had inherited neither her mother's immortality nor her father's resilience, and Claire thought maybe it was better that way.
i also like the way you put in some doll imagery about claire and (i might be reading too far into it, but) also about baby elle. it went perfectly with the lyrics you used. i think you wrote this beautifully! good luck in the challenge.