ext_41317 ([identity profile] aurilly.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] cruiscin_lan 2008-11-17 06:33 pm (UTC)

Wonderful! I've always wanted something like this, where someone sees the future, but it turns out like that anyway. Not that I want Daphne to die, but it would just be an interesting change of pace for the show to have things still go the same way.

You have some really beautiful lines in this:
the burnt surface of her back giving way and bleeding underneath his hands. Simultaneously icky and heartbreakingly sad.
He said no, every time, but after months of her disappearing for days to look at loose ends, to follow false leads, or to just nearly miss him, Matt had finally relented and Molly agreed. I love how there's just this little twinge of selfishness to Matt's actions. He is really trying ot make things different, but at the same time his desire to be with her is the undoing, because he gives in to her in order to keep her there, he's happy even though he knows everyone else is unhappy, etc.

Really good!

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